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Sep 28 2008
By: hammerheel Fender Bender 3620 posts
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poem help

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here is the poem i wrote, do i need periods after every line?
I Am

I am gracious and pleasant
I wonder if the world will end
I hear the wind
I see the stars in the daytime
I want world peace
I am gracious and pleasant

I pretend to be a king
I feel powerful
I touch the stars
I worry about tomorrow
I cry when the Cowboys lose
I am gracious and pleasant

I understand that I am mortal
I say that we need world peace
I dream that I can fly
I try to contribute
I hope tomorrow is better than today
I am gracious and pleasant
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Re: poem help

Sep 28, 2008

Great poem, all you need are commas after every line.

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Re: poem help

Sep 28, 2008

im no english expert, but isnt it supposed to rhyme?

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Sep 28, 2008
not always
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Sep 28, 2008
no. poems are the rebels of the english language. they dont follow rules

think different
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