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Heh the poem thread got me in the mood...

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I don't remember if I posted my more recent poems so I'm just gunna post a sampling. Of course feedback, intereptations, comments are immensely appreciated.
Please, pick out your favorite and tell me what you think it MEANS. That is always important feedback.
And... "cool", "good", "awesome" is not effective feedback. This post is not for spamming. No one word responses, please. At least a sentence. C'mon, you can do that.
 

The Fountain

Beyond the trees,
beyond the night.
Beyond my fears,
beneath the moonlight.
What is this curious
object that is so forsaken?
What power lies in it,
that I can awaken?
In the cover of night,
I flee to the place
where lies the fountain,
with essence I embrace.
The water flows gently
down to the pool,
as if inviting me over,
with water so cool.
I, furtively, walk in
and let the water steep
my body into a timeless
and entrancing sleep.
I feel myself being submerged,
but I cannot awaken.
I choke and sputter
as away I am taken.
Deep in the pool,
I reach a depth unheard
and when looking at the surface,
one would think absurd.
In my mind,
images are shown,
of far off places,
and things unknown.
The fountain fades away,
and so does the pool.
I see mad dictators
and their iron fisted rule.
I see light hearted places,
with no troubles at all.
Disreguard for civilization,
shall be their downfall.
I see the future,
I see that past.
Races that will spread,
and kingdoms that won't last.
I see the end of the world
and by own death.
It passes as the visions end
and I take my last breath.
Drowned...

Is it Paradise?

I see in my mind a thousand verses,
In between the lines, their malicious curses.
Frozen in the depths of time unknown,
Seeking solitude from hate alone.
In this sun-burned, fabricated land,
Come along and take my hand.
Journey to a paradise passed,
One that cannot stand and last.
Drink the milk and honeydew.
Feel the love pulse in you veins anew.
Stand in the light and feel the day.
Let tyrants come, they will pass away.
We are immortal, children of youth.
Let them fall, they are uncouth.
We will not whither away so lightly
We will stand forever brightly.
Leave the world and fall away
Dwindle in the darkness grey.
I cannot leave this paradise
For immortality has a price.
In a invisible prison, I am kept
Many years alone, I have wept.
Time alone is no valued friend
It disconforts and cannot mend.
However I may suffer, it matters not.
I will drink to my youth while you rot.
For love and hate give me no pleasure.
Immortality is the only faith I can treasure.

Alive Again

Pools of light cast down from above
filter out the lingering darkness.
Taken by surprise, my restless soul.
Shedding pale moonlight.

Mirroring light from the other half.
Glittering greatness blazing above.
Still in thedeclining light,
but ever fading as I move on.

Hiding in my own shadow,
waiting for my speckled sky.
When darkened dreams fill the mind,
when peppered stardust glazes the night

Burning brother rolls back down
over the hills, fading fast.
Drawing back a sweltering curtain,
and pulling back sunny tipped fingers.

Now my dominion is clear ahead.
Still taking my brother's helping hand.
Shine back cold light to another eye.
Breathe frosty breath upon the earth.

Held within my depths, a sentimental core.
As I weave a tapestry across the sky,
the dreamer's curious eye turns up ahead.
Where romantics hold dreams in the spotted night.

The sunnyrooster crows his melody,
and my shadow folds over me again.
Brooding silently, taking last breaths,
before I am consumed and cease.

I do not despair nor shed one tear.
The world is in my brother's hands.
I fade away, cold and dormant,
but I know I'll be alive again.

Crash

Gracefull

stars

give the simple gift of....

light.

Shine....the world over.

Peppering over the darkness

with

a twilight ballet.

Admission is free.

Simple beauty.

Yet when they are gone

will they be

missed?

When the world passes by,

romantics look up.

While everyone else

is

still

too

ignorant.

And then

they'll

crash.

 

 

 

The last two are my most recent. The other 2 are very... old.

http://www.fictionpress.com/~shadowfaxofthestormhame

^^^^read some more, leave reviews... I don't get a lot of feedback I guess.... which is why I am making this post.

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I go with the last one since it was the one I read since it was very small.
 
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You got the heart.
The fountain was the best one so far, Crash follows.



Message Edited by -ShaDe- on 12-05-2006 04:55 PM
"I loooove you, but what are we going to do?."Ike Turner is the man.
olvidala mejor olvidala,
arrancala de ti que ya tiene otro amor
olvidala mejor olvidala,
arrancala de ti ve y busca otra ilusion

es que no dejan los recuerdos
si yo le ense��e a amar, fui su primer amor
no sale de mi pensamiento
aun ella vive aqui dentro del corazon
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Re: Heh the poem thread got me in the mood...

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sony32 wrote:
I go with the last one since it was the one I read since it was very small.
 



I said this thread was not a place for spam. But thanks for your amazing input.
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RushCultist2112 wrote:


sony32 wrote:
I go with the last one since it was the one I read since it was very small.
 



I said this thread was not a place for spam. But thanks for your amazing input.



No problem man.
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sony32 wrote:


RushCultist2112 wrote:


sony32 wrote:
I go with the last one since it was the one I read since it was very small.
 



I said this thread was not a place for spam. But thanks for your amazing input.



No problem man.



Yeah I'm obviously a guy too.... *looks at avatar* you're just a genius aren't ya?
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Omg you said "heh" in your thread title, I always say "heh" Smiley Surprised By the way your poems rock
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RushCultist2112 wrote:


sony32 wrote:


RushCultist2112 wrote:


sony32 wrote:
I go with the last one since it was the one I read since it was very small.
 



I said this thread was not a place for spam. But thanks for your amazing input.



No problem man.



Yeah I'm obviously a guy too.... *looks at avatar* you're just a genius aren't ya?


Sorry, my my sincere appolgies apologies go out to you and your family. I did not mean to offend anyone in any way and if you feel any mental or bodily harm I accept full responsibility.
Nah but anyway, I like the second one. Kinda skimed through it and better then I could ever do.
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